Dissapointed By "Abandoned By Disney"

[abyssal_sylph]

Because I'm rewatching Five Nights At Treasure Island: A complete Retrospective by SirFiftyFive I've been thinking about the original "Abandoned By Disney" story by slimebeast.

So I wanna clarify I think its mostly good! When I reread it for the first time in years, it was surprising how genuinely good the text was. It felt like an actual post on a blog about an island & the exprience the author had with it. I also felt like it had a good atmosphere, building up good tension in the story about the unease of the setting. Even the giant snake section felt like a real experiance the protag had despite the reported size of it.

& then photo-negative mickey happens...

I don't think it should've been executed the way it was. The idea of a costume standing in front of the protag, asking the line it does & taking of its head is fine in concept. It can be a creepy way to end the story. But the fact the costume is photo-negative instead of regular or moldy & that the blood is yellow and shown ruins the story for me. I feel like it was an attempt by the author to bait the audiance to draw art of it. Which, fine I guess, and it worked. But I feel like it doesn't fit the setting or tone of the story.

I've heard that slimebeast wrote 3 other stories in this universe & I'm curious about how the author furthered this setting. But I will admit that this story in specific leaves a sour taste in my mouth.

Comments

[particleghost]

I read the story back when it was first posted. The golden age of creepypastas is so nostalgic for me. I remember being really scared on my first reading, but for every subsequent one the story had more holes in it, with the photonegative Mickey costume being the biggest wtf moment. It's too over the top in a way that breaks the otherwise realistic tone, and the final message on the wall was extremely cliche and corny. Like you said, the buildup is great and the story is mostly good, but a horror story hinges on it's climax the same way a joke relies on it's punchline, so having that moment be the weakest point of a good story is really a shame. I also heard of the sequels, but i haven't read those either. Having a four part saga of creepypastas sounds it would be a little excessive.

[abyssal_sylph]

I feel like "abandoned by god" is such a meme-y phrase, so it for sure doesn't help the break from imersion. Also I don't think having a multipart creepypasta is inheritly a bad idea, though it is one I think can be easily badly executed.

I was always too scardy cat to finish creepypastas, but they bring me some nostalgia too. It was my first exposure to horror stuff & my creepier ideas are colored by my years listening to YouTubers reading out creepypastas.