I feel like "abandoned by god" is such a meme-y phrase, so it for sure doesn't help the break from imersion. Also I don't think having a multipart creepypasta is inheritly a bad idea, though it is one I think can be easily badly executed.

I was always too scardy cat to finish creepypastas, but they bring me some nostalgia too. It was my first exposure to horror stuff & my creepier ideas are colored by my years listening to YouTubers reading out creepypastas.